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owlfish at 09:17pm on 23/08/2003
owlfish at 09:17pm on 23/08/2003When I asked C. for help on how to edit this sentence so it would be more comprehensible, he told me to go write it down as proof that I'm an academic. So here you are:
"Edward Rosen, in his 1956 article, established the modern historical understanding of the development of the history of the invention of eyeglasses. "
The funny thing is, the sentence does correctly describe the situation. Alas, it's too compact to be lucid, and an example of how important editing is in order to improve text, especially when that text is from one of my early drafts.
"Edward Rosen, in his 1956 article, established the modern historical understanding of the development of the history of the invention of eyeglasses. "
The funny thing is, the sentence does correctly describe the situation. Alas, it's too compact to be lucid, and an example of how important editing is in order to improve text, especially when that text is from one of my early drafts.
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